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Post by K'Sennia Visitor on Aug 21, 2018 21:45:45 GMT
Let's say you accidentally locked yourself outside of your house. It wasn't actually your house. It was your parents house and you'd been forced to move back in with them due to horribly sad life circumstances. You had been staying there for several months now when the door-locking incident happened. There was a locked screen at the front of the house and a real door behind it that was open. Your folks are picking friends up at the airport and then showing them around, they won't be back till supper. You left your phone inside, of course, and you don't have a car (you had to sell it to be able to afford to move back home) and your parents took their vehicle. You don't really know any of the neighbors, plus, you're the strong, independent type and don't like to ask for help. So you start looking for something sharp you can use to try and cut the screen, so you can climb back inside. While you're doing this a concerned neighbor who doesn't know you calls the police.
So they show up in their squad car, two female cops, so you think they'll be nice and maybe they'll help you get back inside. Instead they interrogate you and when you can't show ID or prove to them you live there, they slap you in handcuffs, stuff you in the back of the police car, and haul you off to jail. Once you're there you get one phone call, but the only phone number you remember is the number of the man you ran away from, so you're stuck in jail waiting for your legal aid attorney, and you're having a really bad life.
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Post by eleutheria on Aug 22, 2018 0:30:59 GMT
Yeah, that's believable. Murphy's Law is a thing for a reason.  Just make sure to establish all of the factors that screw up his/her ability to get back into the house, preferably beforehand and not during this scene. |
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Post by paranormalkitty on Aug 22, 2018 1:44:25 GMT
It's more believable than anything I've written by far.
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Post by K'Sennia Visitor on Aug 22, 2018 1:54:59 GMT
Yeah, that's believable. Murphy's Law is a thing for a reason. Just make sure to establish all of the factors that screw up his/her ability to get back into the house, preferably beforehand and not during this scene. Thanks!  Now I just have to figure out what the point of her going to jail will be. I've got a few options. She could meet someone in jail. Or while she is there her mom answers her phone and tells the ex where she is, which allows him to pop into town. And maybe there is a nice security guard working there who likes her and believes her story, but he's just a guard, so he doesn't have any authority to let her out. But he talks to her and helps her calm down and stuff. On her way out he gives her his phone number, and she calls him, and they go out and have a good time. Then the bad ex shows up and threatens both of them, etc. I would be going for romantic suspense, like a love inspired suspense story. |
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Post by DD on Aug 22, 2018 2:13:29 GMT
Yeah, that's believable. Murphy's Law is a thing for a reason. Just make sure to establish all of the factors that screw up his/her ability to get back into the house, preferably beforehand and not during this scene. Thanks! Now I just have to figure out what the point of her going to jail will be. I've got a few options. She could meet someone in jail. Or while she is there her mom answers her phone and tells the ex where she is, which allows him to pop into town. And maybe there is a nice security guard working there who likes her and believes her story, but he's just a guard, so he doesn't have any authority to let her out. But he talks to her and helps her calm down and stuff. On her way out he gives her his phone number, and she calls him, and they go out and have a good time. Then the bad ex shows up and threatens both of them, etc. I would be going for romantic suspense, like a love inspired suspense story. Actually, it sounds like something that would happen to me, LOL Hey, maybe the legal aid attorney is really hot, or the bail bondsman. Or hell, the magistrate or judge, or whoever determines bail. |
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Post by K'Sennia Visitor on Aug 22, 2018 3:23:39 GMT
Thanks! Now I just have to figure out what the point of her going to jail will be. I've got a few options. She could meet someone in jail. Or while she is there her mom answers her phone and tells the ex where she is, which allows him to pop into town. And maybe there is a nice security guard working there who likes her and believes her story, but he's just a guard, so he doesn't have any authority to let her out. But he talks to her and helps her calm down and stuff. On her way out he gives her his phone number, and she calls him, and they go out and have a good time. Then the bad ex shows up and threatens both of them, etc. I would be going for romantic suspense, like a love inspired suspense story. Actually, it sounds like something that would happen to me, LOL Hey, maybe the legal aid attorney is really hot, or the bail bondsman. Or hell, the magistrate or judge, or whoever determines bail. I'm glad Darcy will be relateable. I decided on the jail guard for her hero. He wants to be a deputy sheriff, but there weren't enough jobs open when he and his cousin applied, but the jail needed guards desperately, so Ethan accepted that job for the time being. He could have tried applying at another department but his family all live there and he doesn't like the idea of wasting valuable family time on a daily commute. |
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Post by davidvandyke on Aug 23, 2018 18:32:17 GMT
Just search for some news stories like that. I've read them. It's perfectly believable.
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Post by corabuhlert on Aug 25, 2018 22:49:43 GMT
Actor Ving Rhames recently found cops with drawn guns on his doorstep, because a neighbour had seen him around his house and didn't recognise him and called the cops on him. And this was a highly recognizable actor who had a part in a popular film that was in theatres at the time.
So in short, yeah, it's only too believable.
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Just make sure to establish all of the factors that screw up his/her ability to get back into the house, preferably beforehand and not during this scene.
Now I just have to figure out what the point of her going to jail will be. I've got a few options. She could meet someone in jail. Or while she is there her mom answers her phone and tells the ex where she is, which allows him to pop into town. And maybe there is a nice security guard working there who likes her and believes her story, but he's just a guard, so he doesn't have any authority to let her out. But he talks to her and helps her calm down and stuff. On her way out he gives her his phone number, and she calls him, and they go out and have a good time. Then the bad ex shows up and threatens both of them, etc. 
